雅思大作文范文:Childhood Obesity

 Childhood Obesity

IELTS Writing Task 2

 
In developed and developing countries obesity comes near fatally affecting many people, particularly children who seem to be powerless to overcome the most uncomfortable and sometimes deadly effects of this chronic disease.  Childhood obesity rates are becoming out of control, leading to about a third of children reportedly being overweight.  This disagreeable medical condition, however, can be traced in large part to want of physical exercise along with a healthy diet.
 
Quite a few children tend to eat too much too badly.  To begin with, they feel like eating anything that tastes good and every junk food advertised on television, even though they are not hungry.  This being the case, a "fashion" diet characteristic of fat calories is first an attraction, then an obsession.  At the same time, the majority of their parents are worried of course, but they may be just shouting about losing weight rather than keeping their children's mouths shut.  Indeed, unless the eating habit can be changed for fiber intake,  dieting is hardly "a piece of cake."  That is probably why eating a healthy diet has gradually been regarded as something of a virtue, although fat is an oral problem instead of a moral issue.

 
Lack of physical activity can only push obesity rate even higher.  New research suggests that inactivity is one of the greatest contributor to overweight, rightly so because of the negative influence of television and the Internet.  More often than not, children prefer to stay indoors, turning themselves into couch potatoes and mouse potatoes.  Their bodies almost motionless, they seem to walk at intervals a few meters no farther than the distance between a TV or computer screen and a refrigerator.  The same report also finds that normal weight children usually appear to be less distracted by electronic entetainments than their overweight peers.  With obesity becoming morbid obesity or even super obesity, excess body fat would make it impossible for obese children to do any kind of physical exercise.
 
To conclude, dieting and physical exercise are the mainstays of treatment for obesity because, except for a few hereditary factors, this common illness is said to be a preventable cause of health problems like high blood pressure, heart disease, diabetes.  Those obese boys and girls must be assured accordingly that reducing weight and narrowing waistline can be a reality and not merely "wishful shrinking."  And yet, without the will power to make success happen and lengthen the life expectancy, they would be as if digging their early graves with knives and forks.  (by Mr. Jeenn Lee Hsieh)


 
 
 圆形。定位。装配
 
写托福写雅思的短篇论说文是吹牛的工作,动手之前要先把题目弄清楚,如此吹牛才不会文不对题。英文写作是两面工作。作文只是吹牛带逻辑,难不倒龙的传人。英文表达能力比较伤脑筋,考生怕英文而不是怕作文。练习英文写作找中教或找外教各有好处。外教的英语道地,吹牛差一点。中教精于吹牛,英语通常不够地道
 
作文的逻辑是圆形。心图就是完整的从0度绕一圈到360度。一篇文章开头的第一句与结尾的最后一句绝对是前后连贯。绕经过主体内容段落的路程必须按着圆形心图走。考试评分官主要在看你作的短文》主题有焦点,结构有组织,内容有支持。同时看你的英文表达能力》语言效率,句型变化,字汇恰当。大家查一下雅思或托福的写作评分标准。所谓高分写作的要求,官方的公告讲得清清楚楚
 
应付写作单项测验,必须注意作文的逻辑与英文的表达,还必须强调速度绕圆圈。目标300英文字。机考托福平均一分钟写一句话。手写雅思一分半种组一句话。如果定位起承转合,装配18句 3-6-6-3,托福需18分钟 vs 雅思27分钟。看试题,拟心图准备吹牛的时间至少要五分钟。也许考雅思或考托福都要保留八分钟或七分钟来应付状况,包含校对。由此观之,打字一分钟一句,笔写一句1.5分钟。办不到?会出问题了。
 
写作用模板则弄巧成拙,笑死人。背范文则文不对题,考0分。考试的应急对策是套公式:圆形-定位-装配。谢振礼老师备有多篇杂文探讨圆形逻辑,定位四段,装配18句。考生如果没有长久之计,熟练公式的运用,也许可以对付当务之急

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