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2012年2月25日雅思范文：课外活动

真题+范文+讲评
海外大学教师谢振礼

IELTS Writing Task 2

Essay Topic：真题回忆

>Full-time university students need to spend a lot of time on studying, but it is essential to get involved in other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Model Essay

Jeenn Lee Hsieh

On college campuses, extracurricular involvement is a key tool to develop the "whole student." It is appropriate to say that full-time university students should not only spend a lot of time on studying but also interact with their peers in social activities, thus improving their social skills. While time spent on studying can enhance academic achievement, time spent on getting involved in out-of-the-classroom activities will help students mature socially on the individual student level and the professional level.

The development of the well-rounded individual is a principle goal of extracurricular activities during college years. A variety of personal experiences that these activities provide could positively impact students' emotional development. When working together with other individuals, students learn to communicate and gain more self-confidence, autonomy and appreciation for others' similarities and differences. Further, by identifying a peer group, that group may influence one's affective and cognitive development as well as one's personal behavior. In addition, taking part in activities outside the classroom enables one, among other things, to learn to negotiate, manage conflict and cooperate with fellow students. And last but not least, almost any type of extracurricular activities may help students to understand the importance of critical thinking skills.

Students can also upgrade their social skills specific to their career paths and imperative for future job successes in different fields. Extracurricular involvement allows students to associate academic knowledge with practical experience, thereby leading to a better awareness of of their abilities, talents and career goals. Nowadays, good social skills are nearly as important as good academic qualifications since future employers seek exactly these remarkable skill standards. This is understandable, considering that participation in extracurricular activities is positively linked to attainment of one's first job and managerial potential. The campus is a place where students can work together, discuss pertinent ideas and issues, and accomplish common objectives. It is nothing less than an environment for students to feel socially connected with others and the university as their community.

To sum up, for young people, attending higher education is meant to advance academically and to mature socially. University students ought to be encouraged to get involved in activities ranging from students' government to athletics to professional organizations to multicultural events and to volunteer service-related projects. Such activities exist to more fully complement the university's academic curriculum and augment the student's social experience. (Jeenn Lee Hsieh, essay3663@hotmail.com )

谢振礼老师文后点评：

》个人心得技巧 --

圆形心图=隐形模板。（起3承6转6合3。）
围绕主题=圆形结构。四段定位。18句装配。

语言效率=修辞+句法+字汇。

》引言破题三句--

第一句：主题=真题+立场（观点）--参加大学课外活动才算是完全的大学生。
第二句：缩小主题成焦点（冲突）--对比教室内学科的时间与教室外的课外活动。
第三句：预表中体段内容（分头）--课外活动有助于学生的社会成熟与就业准备。

》作文大纲--

【起】开头申论主题：课外活动=社会成熟+就业准备。

【承】接头支持主题：有助于大学生个人的社会成熟。

【转】转头支持主题：有助于大学生个人的就业准备。

【合】回头重申主题：社会成熟+就业准备=课外活动

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