修改后：A large number of people think that they had completed their education when they finished their schooling. They fail to realize that a person’s education is a most important aspect of his life。
International travel has given rise to large numbers of employment opportunities. For example, retail, hospitality and transportation。
点评：增加细节引起的破句。往往以下面的词语开头：for example, also, except, such as, including, especially, among, like。
修改后：International travel has given rise to large numbers of employment opportunities in retail, hospitality and transportation。
Many sociologists point out that rural emigrants are putting pressure on population control. And also threatening to take already scarce city jobs。
点评：缺少主语的破句。用and之类连词打头的短语或句子居多，可通过使破句依附于前面的句子或加上主语的方式进行更正。
修改后：Many sociologists point out that rural emigrants are putting pressure on population control and also threatening to take already scarce city jobs。
3、 错误的平行结构
所谓平行结构，就是指两个(或以上)意思并列的成份(包括单词、词组、从句和句子)在写作时要用同等的语法形式表达，并保证逻辑上的一致，否则就破坏了其平行结构。
①错误的并列
In order to attract tourists, a lot of artificial facilities have been built and which have certain unfavorable effects on the environment。
点评：and who/and which 结构是考生所犯的错误中最常见但最严重的一种，因为它导致从句与主句间一种不合逻辑的关系。
修改后：In order to attract tourists, a lot of artificial facilities have been built, which have certain unfavorable effects on the environment。
②一系列平行结构上的不正确使用
Many people choose air transportation because it is fast, offers convenience and it is not very expensive。
点评：当词或词组被放在一个系列时，它们在意义上和结构上必须都是平行的。
修改后：Many people choose air transportation because it is fast, convenient and inexpensive。
③错误的省略
It is commonly thought that modern technology has and will dramatically change our society。
点评：这种错误在have/ has ,will, shall结构中较为常见。
修改后：It is commonly thought that modern technology has dramatically changed our society and it will continue。
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