雅思高分必读:增强语句表现力的五王牌

    1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：

    Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)

    Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)

    2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：

    1) Weak: The team members are good players.

    Revision: The team members play well.

    2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.

    Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.

    3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如：

    1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.

    Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.

    2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.

    Revision: The books you ordered have arrived. 
   二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：

    1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.

    Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.

    2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.

    Better: She compares prices and quality.

    三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：

    1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.

    Better: Charity has supported the organization.

    2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.

    Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.