雅思考试写作部分经典错误与分析

一.不一致(disagreements)

所谓不一致不光指主谓不一致,它还包括了数的不一致时态不一致及代词不一致等.

例1. when one have money ,he can do what he want to .

(人一旦有了钱,他就能想干什么就干什么.)

剖析:one是单数第三人称,因而本句的have应改为has ;同理,want应改为wants.本句是典型的主谓不一致.

改为:once one has money ,he can do what he wants (to do)

二.修饰语错位(misplaced modifiers)

英语与汉语不同,同一个修饰语置于句子不同的位置,句子的含义可能引起变化.对于这一点中国学生往往没有引起足够的重视,因而造成了不必要的误解.例1. i believe i can do it well and i will better know the world outside the campus.

剖析:better位置不当,应置于句末.

三.句子不完整(sentence fragments)

在口语中,交际双方可借助手势语气上下文等,不完整的句子完全可以被理解.可是书面语就不同了,句子结构不完整会令意思表达不清,这种情况常常发生在主句写完以后,笔者又想加些补充说明时发生.

例1. there are many ways to know the society. for example by tv ,radio ,newspaper and so on .

剖析:本句后半部分”for example by tv ,radio ,newspaper and so on .”不是一个完整的句子,仅为一些不连贯的词语,不能独立成句.

改为:there are many ways to know society ,for example ,by tv ,radio ,and newspaper.

四.悬垂修饰语(dangling modifiers)

所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子的逻辑关系混乱不清.例如:at the age of ten, my grandfather died.这句中”at the age of ten”只点出十岁时,但没有说明”谁”十岁时.按一般推理不可能是my grandfather,如果我们把这个悬垂修饰语改明确一点,全句就不那么费解了.

改为:

when i was ten, my grandfather died.

例1. to do well in college, good grades are essential.

剖析:句中不定式短语“to do well in college”的逻辑主语不清楚.

改为:

to do well in college, a student needs good grades.

五.词性误用(misuse of parts of speech)

“词性误用”常表现为:介词当动词用;形容词当副词用;名词当动词用等.

例1. none can negative the importance of money.

剖析:negative系形容词,误作动词。

改为:

none can deny the importance of money.

六.指代不清(ambiguous reference of pronouns)

指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物关系不清,或者先后所用的代词不一致。试看下面这一句:

mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.

(玛丽和我姐姐很要好,因为她要她做她的伴娘。)

读完上面这一句话,读者无法明确地判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚,谁将当伴娘。如果我们把易于引起误解的代词的所指对象加以明确,意思就一目了然了。这个句子可改为:

mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.

例1. and we can also know the society by serving it yourself.

剖析:句中人称代词we和反身代词yourself指代不一致。改为:

we can also know society by serving it ourselves.

七.不间断句子(run-on sentences)

什么叫run-on sentence?请看下面的例句。

例1. there are many ways we get to know the outside world.

剖析:这个句子包含了两层完整的意思:“there are many ways.”以及“we get to know the outside world.”。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。

改为:

there are many ways for us to learn about the outside world.或:

there are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world

八.措词毛病(troubles in diction)

diction是指在特定的句子中怎样适当地选用词语的问题,囿于教学时间紧迫,教师平时在这方面花的时间往往极其有限,影响了学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲,斟酌的习惯。他们往往随心所欲,拿来就用。所以作文中用词不当的错误比比皆是。

例1. the increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.

(农业方面化学物质使用的不断增加也造成了污染。)

剖析:显然,考生把obstacles“障碍”,“障碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use (不断增加的使用)”应改为“abusive use (滥用)”。

改为:

the abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.

九.累赘(redundancy)

言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词;写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组;能用词组的不用从句或句子。如:

in spite of the fact that he is lazy, i like him.

本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句,我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为:in spite of his laziness, i like him.

例1. for the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.

剖析:整个句子可以大大简化。

改为:

diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.

十.不连贯(incoherence)

不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语,或是结构上不畅通。这也是考生常犯的毛病。

例1. the fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.

剖析:the fresh water与逗号后的it不连贯。it与things在数方面不一致。

改为:

fresh water is the most important thing in the world.

十一.综合性语言错误(comprehensive misusage)

所谓“综合性语言错误”,是指除了上述十种错误以外,还有诸如时态,语态,标点符号,大小写等方面的错误。

例1.today, money to everybody is very importance, our’s eat, cloth, live, go etc.

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