雅思写作考官9分范文：大学教育

小编为大家带来一篇雅思前考官simon的一篇范文，话题是关于大学教育的：Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.请看小编对其进行的逐段解读，今天，无关结构，无关框架，我们只关心好词与佳句。

1.People have different views about how much choice students should have with regard to what they can study at university. While some argue that it would be better for students to be forced into certain key subject areas, I believe that everyone should be able to study the course of their choice.

雅思写作考官范文解读：导入段首句(People have different views about how much choice students should have with regard to what they can study at university)写得非常的精当，小白如画地提取出了话题的主要内容，这种对原题的转述能力，才是真真正正的同此替换，而不是很多雅思考生容易将其狭隘理解的那种高级单词替换简单单词的过程。此外，将话题中的“only be allowed to”转述为“be forced into”，也体现出了英语小词的使用能力。而“of their choice”的使用则是超乎大多数人的写作习惯(一般是一个定于从句that they want )，用简单的结构替换从句，很显然是棋高一着。

2.There are various reasons why people believe that universities should only offer subjects that will be useful in the future. They may assert that university courses like medicine, engineering and information technology are more likely to be beneficial than certain art degrees. From a personal perspective, it can be argued that these courses provide more job opportunities, career progression, better salaries, and therefore an improved quality of life for students who take them. On the societal level, by forcing people to choose particular university subjects, governments can ensure that any knowledge and skill gaps in the economy are covered. Finally, a focus on technology in higher education could lead to new inventions, economic growth, and greater future prosperity.

雅思写作考官范文解读：雅思大作文body部分的首段。第1，2句可以看成是观点句(第一句算是概括，而第二句则是抛出具体的观点)，同样用词极为简洁，这样做是为了让阅读者以最快的速度了解其观点。assert一词是与上一段的argue近义，常见的替换。不过这儿最需要给烤鸭说道说道的是情态动词may，有必要回顾一下导入段的几个情态动词的使用：should have, would be, should be,。情态动词的合理使用可以说是高分雅思作文的必备品。这些情态动词有什么作用呢?，除开情态动词，往往会使表达显得礼貌之外，往往会会让语句的表意更加准确而中肯。很多烤鸭大概不陌生这样一种表达：no one can deny that或者there is no doubt that, 不知道你们看到这种句子是的感觉是怎样的，反正我看到这种句子顿时升起一种反感，作者那傲慢且无知的形象更是跃然纸上。我要是就是要deny呢，我要是就是有doubt呢!所以，一个may(其实本段下面还有一个can起着同样的作用)就将整个语气缓和，观点也变得更加站得住脚，不会有一种走极端的感觉。more job opportunities, career progression, better salaries, and therefore an improved quality of life for students who take them，这一连串的列举非常的有气势，阅卷人估计也会看爽。好似一招长江三叠浪，更多的工作机会，职业成长，薪水，由此更好的生活品质，可以说是干净利落的论证，让人不得不信服。另外from a personal perspective和on the societal level都是高分表达，但其实又都很简单。

3.In spite of these arguments, I believe that university students should be free to choose their preferred areas of study. In my opinion, society will benefit more if our students are passionate about what they are learning. Besides, nobody can really predict which areas of knowledge will be most useful to society in the future, and it may be that employers begin to value creative thinking skills above practical or technical skills. If this were the case, perhaps we would need more students of art, history and philosophy than of science or technology.

雅思写作考官范文解读：好词preferred。简洁有力表达 society benefit more，value...above...。非常地道的表达if this were the case(意思是real)当然最让人称道的是开头的in spite of，可以说是非常的个性，但是却无缝地与上一段对接上，并且还与上一段的首句有一种呼应感。

4.In conclusion, although it might seem sensible for universities to focus only on the most useful subjects, I personally prefer the current system in which people have the right to study whatever they like.

解读：同样的情态动词的运用，妙不可言!!!可以说结论句中might与后面personally的搭配非常完美。

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